Looks good. I think in the 2nd to last dialog changing the last sentence to something along the lines of "And with the help of your support, no one will be without hope." Keeping it simple and more directed to the person watching the video.
Can you change the last part to "To find out how you can help in your area go to www.cityofhope.org/fundraising-offices and find the office near you. 100 years of care and discovery."
Looks good. I think in the 2nd to last dialog changing the last sentence to something along the lines of "And with the help of your support, no one will be without hope." Keeping it simple and more directed to the person watching the video.
ReplyDeleteCan you change the last part to "To find out how you can help in your area go to www.cityofhope.org/fundraising-offices and find the office near you. 100 years of care and discovery."
Hope this helps!